This is an interesting design; I see what you're getting at - it's to the point, the typeface you use gives the feel that we don't have it in control. My question is, however, would someone be able to read that well if they were even a few feet away - especially the smaller text? Is there other ways you could show the contrast of lacking control and control within the design? Just things to think about..I hope my comments are helpful; I like the words you used in particular, and hope to see more things like this from you!
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